New About page

[par]

I was reluctant to translating our About page because I wanted to make it better.
Today you can see the new About page with as little words as I could and lots of pictures.

What do you think?
Would it be easy for a person who did not know about YoWindow to understand what YoWindow is about?

My special request to our English native speaking friends. Please let me know about my grammar mistakes.

[coolcovers]

Grammatically it would read better this way:
YoWindow is a weather program for a new generation.

The magic of YoWindow is the living landscape that reflects actual weather.

YoWindow is the #1 weather program on CNET's download.com.



.................just a suggestion, BTW thanks again for the KEY, I try to tell everyone I can about this great program!!

-Tom

[par]

Dear Tom, thank you for corrections!

The meaning of the first sentence is different.
I want to tell 2 things.
1. YoWindow is a weather program.
2. This is the next generation of weather software (like Terminator 2 after Terminator 1 ).

How would you put a single SIMPLE sentence explaining this?

[countryroads]

Hi Pasha,

YoWindow is a weather program for a new generation. I am having a problem with this statement.

....for a new generation. Of people? or a new generation of weather program?

I know you are trying to say a new generation of weather program, but that is not how I am reading it.

Since I am an English major and a Math major, let me think about how it needs to be phrased.

You have the grass swinging to the wind. When I think of grass moving, I think of grass swaying in the wind.

I will think of more later.

Marty

[par]

Thanks, Marty!!!!!
I have updated About page according to your and Tom's advice.
May I ask you a question when I have trouble with math?

[coolcovers]

I think:
YoWindow is a new generation of weather program.

...would get those points across.
-Tom

[Mallorca]

Hi Pasha,
I'm not a native in English (only a poor German "Kraut" )

YoWindow is a weather program of a new generation.

but in my "linguistic instinct" it doesn't point out what do you mean.

YoWindow is a new generation of weather program.

as Tom suggested sounds better ...

I will send the German translation with private message to you.

Werner

[par]

Thanks, friends!
Werner, please hold on.
We will review About page with Yura.
Probably add or remove some content.
I will inform all our translators as soon as About page is ready.
I will also add About page strings to Pootle so it will be easy for you and other translators to translate.

[coolcovers]

This:
Seasons are changing in sync with nature.
would also probably read better as
Seasons change in sync with nature.

-Tom

[countryroads]

Hi Pasha,

Grass swaying with the wind - or - Grass swaying in the wind - would be better than Grass swaying to the wind.

We hope you will love watching the weather as we do. - or - We hope you will love watching the weather as much as we do.
would read better than We hope you will love watching the weather as we did.

Marty